My Rotten Red Headed Older Brother

Today we listened to the story My Rotten Readheaded Older Brother by Patricia Polacco. It made me think of a time when my brother & I were wrestling on the trampoline. My name was Duncan Turner & his was Johnny Tyson. We had cardboard boxes as tables and pillows as chairs. We had a ladder with a title above it. So we got the match started. When he first kicked me, I fell then I hopped up and did the ddt. When he was knocked out I got the table out. When I set it up he go up and I hit him with the chair. While he was on the ground I climbed the ladder and waited. When he got up I tackled him through the table. After that I got another table and I choked slammed him through the table. He popped up and did the stone cold stunner to me. He put the chair in my face and jumped on it. When he tried to get the title I pushed him off the ladder. I got on top of the ladder and did a backflip on him. After that I got the title. (it was the Hardcore Championship!)
by Brian
**some of the things we noticed that Brian did really well were: he used strong action verbs like tackled, hopped, slammed, popped,and jumped; he used details like boxes as tables, and pillows were chairs; he used time order sequence; he used great sentence variety

Today we listened to the story. My Rotten Red-Head Older Brother by Patricia Polacco. It made me the about my rotten head older brother. The reason I called him my rotten head brother is because he is rotten. Mrs. Evan’s doesn’t know because she doesn’t live with us. But at home he is always being bad. The thing he does is really horrible. He is always beating me up. He is never listening. He doesn’t follow direction and does not take no for an answer. But the worst thing about him is that he beats up on all the little kids. Oh and one time he came really close to breaking my arm by twisting or bending it as far as it will go. That is why I call him my rotten head older brother.
by Heaven
**We noticed that Heaven gave specific reasons/things her brother does; she uses logical organization and good sentence variety. I especially liked the sentence, "Mrs. Evans doesn't live with us" It showed her voice